Whao...this is very...deserted! (=)
Well...it has a derserted desert feel i can say that! I don't know if thats supposed to be a windy background...or is it the microphone? Because it sounds like a windy background to me! No man thats a good thing! What you should rly do though is record this. Then put it on some WAV. editor or somet other music making software and add an atmospherre to it! You have very good equipment and your almost complete! Overall nice though!
Keep it \V/ man!
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